Just passing through… End of the Road @KMNbooks #8sunday #snippetsunday

Setup for this snippet with a recap from last week: Cecilia didn't believe in ghosts until her father, who died tragically 23 years ago, appears to her. She's still trying to wrap her mind around the fact that ghosts are real. We're jumping ahead a few sentences in this snippet from last week's. She threw a few questions at her father. One she asked if her mother could see him. Her father told her no, but he thought she could sense his presence.

Now for the snippet. Cecilia glances at her father, taking in his appearance all at once...

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Her gaze met his, blue eyes so much like hers. "Dad?" she said and her voice cracked with emotion. If for a moment she believed the impossible, this was her father. "Daddy?" slipped out before she could stop herself and she crossed the room to him.ย He opened his arms to her, but instead of feeling the comfort of his embrace she passed right through him and a cold tingling sensation and a crackle of electricity followed, making her shiver in response.

She whirled around to find her father had turned to face her too. His eyes widened and he seemed just as stunned as she felt. She tentatively reached for him again and though he appeared solid, her hand passed right through his upper arm and the same cold tingle spread through her fingers and the crackle of static echoed in her ears. Touching him didn't really shock her like static electricity, but she did feel something, like a resistance where he stood, as if the cool air numbing her fingers was actually the substance that made up her father, but there was nothing more. He was not a solid form, not like someone who was alive and not dead.

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Blurb:

Lars Gunner, the frontman for Silent Plaids, died 23 years ago and has been trapped in limbo until his daughter, Cecilia, unearths his journal and is able to see him. His death was ruled an unfortunate accident, but he's convinced it was murder despite the fact he can't recall what happened to him in his last moments of life. Cecilia seeks help from Kaleb, a psychic, but as they resurrect the past, the secrets and lies surrounding Lars' rock and roll life just may be the death of them too.

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31 thoughts on “Just passing through… End of the Road @KMNbooks #8sunday #snippetsunday”

  1. Nicely explained. I’m sure it would hurt her to know he’s so close, but she can’t really touch / feel him.

  2. Great description how it feels to touch a ghost, and a good portrayal of her confusion and shock when she realises the substance of her father isn’t actually what she expected!

  3. So sad. I know when my father died I was convinced I saw him on the street, but it wasn’t him – just a man with a similar head shape. I think I would have said, ‘Daddy?’ as well if it had been him.

  4. good description of the father. Her hand passed through his arm. I had a connection with the movie, “Ghost,” with that line. #wewriwa

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