It's Six Sentence Sunday and This is the 10th snippet from The Spirit of Love.
If this is your first SSS, here's a quick update: Brynna and Travis lost their son (Jake) due to a tragic bicycle accident. Instead of turning to each other they drifted apart. However, they own a Ghost Hunting business and they were scheduled for a night at the Queen Mary. This is the first time they have seen each other in months. In this scene: It takes place a few paragraphs after Snippet 9 left off. Here's Snippet 7 And Snippet 8.
In this scene: Brynna tells Travis that she knew he was slipping away but she didn't have the energy to change the destructive path they were on. She missed Jake so much and the weight of the grief was drowning her. It hurt to relive the horror of their loss.
Travis then asks her if she blamed him for Jake's death since he bought their son the bike. She tells him no and wonders if he blames her for giving Jake permission to ride it that day. Travis is speaking first and reveals he does not blame her for Jake's death either.
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Now for the six:
He looked at her now. “I wanted to hold you and tell you everything would be all right, but in my heart I knew nothing would ever be all right again. I couldn’t fix this. I couldn’t bring our little boy back.”
Brynna blinked back tears. “What happened to us, Travis? When Jake was hit by the car, what we had as a family died with him.”
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Wow. The emotion is strong in your sentences. Draws the reader in.
Jerrie,
I’m so glad the snippet drew you in. Thanks for coming by for a sneak peek.
Heartbreaking…but great six.
Valerie,
Heartbreaking is what I was going for.
God, this is just heartbreaking!
Angela,
I wanted the readers to feel for Travis and know he was a good man who is hurting. They both were and they needed each other, but sometimes it isn’t enough. Thanks for coming by.
Sad but powerful six.
Thanks Veronica.
At least they’re finally talking to each other.
Hi Sue,
Yes, finally they’re talking and hopefully they will be able to work past their grief.
Oh, Karen! What a heartbreaking scene…but hopeful. Loved it!
Thanks so much, Silver!
Whew! This is a deeply emotional story. Great snippet.
Sarah,
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed the snippet.
Very emotionally powerful.
Thanks, Carrie-Anne.
This is utterly heartbreaking. I have a friend who lost a child and the emotion in this rings so horribly true. You captured it well.
Being a parent, I know it would be the worse kind of pain to experience and something you don’t ever ‘just’ get over. My cousin lost his boy (illness). It was just heartbreaking.