Welcome to Snippet Sunday.
We're continuing from where we left off last week. If you're interested, here's the link to last weeks snippet from WANTED:
Jace is bringing JoBeth back to his home for supper. Since she's an outlaw and he's the sheriff, JoBeth is suspicious of his motives, and continues to question him.
Jace Kelly's POV.
*The excerpt may have been modified to fit the 10 sentence limit. 
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"Mrs. Gunthry is the finest cook around.""And she won't mind you bringing home a wanted criminal?" she asked as she stood close to him, her green eyes challenging him to speak the truth.
"It's my home, JoBeth, and I say who's welcome and who is not." He opened the door for her and closed it once they stood on the boardwalk. He stepped into the street and untied his horse, Chestnut, from the post. When he glanced at JoBeth, he found her smoothing down her wrinkled coat and having not a lick of success in making it presentable.
A second later, she caught him staring and halted her attempts. Pink colored her cheeks, but she held her head high, refusing to give into her embarrassment.
It didn't matter to him if the coat was wrinkled, since it served the purpose of keeping her warm and it was a mighty cold night to be without one.
Outlaw or not, JoBeth proved to still be a woman beneath the tough persona she displayed to the world.
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Who thinks JoBeth is a little nervous to be having dinner with the Kellys? Hope you enjoyed the snippet of WANTED.
Until next week, take care.
About the Book:
Sheriff Jace Kelly's wife died birthing his remarkable daughter, Emma. She inherited the families' seer abilities. At six years old, she can't tell the difference between a vision and an ordinary dream. So Jace doesn't put much faith in Emma's recent premonition: marriage for him and a new mother for her.
When JoBeth Riley arrives, Emma is convinced she's the woman in her dream: dark hair, green eyes, and shamrocks in her pocket. There's one problem – she's the notorious outlaw, Baby Face Jo. Her stay in town is meant to keep Shane Maverick, the leader of the outlaw gang, from finding her before the authorities devise a plan to capture him.
JoBeth finds the Kellys a strange lot. A little girl, who believes her dreams are tales of the future and the rugged sheriff whose kindness proves a distraction. She's an outlaw, for heaven's sake, but Jace is bound and determined to steal her heart.
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I think she’s not only nervous, but wanting to make a good impression. A touch of vanity, perhaps?
PT,
She’s going home to the sheriff’s house. The Kellys are fine upstanding citizens. JoBeth already doesn’t think she belongs, and glancing at her clothes after being on the road for days, she can also visually see she doesn’t. Yes, maybe a little vain, but just maybe she’d like to at least pretend to fit in—even if it’s only for the night.
Nice touch of feminine fussing. I love JoBeth already.
Kim,
So glad you enjoyed the snippet.
I love the snippet, showing just a little bit more of both their characters.
Iris,
Thanks so much.
These subtle actions make it so easy to sympathize with your characters–even the ones who don’t want sympathy! 🙂
Sarah,
So glad you could see this. 🙂
Delicious touches of vanity and worry here as they ride off into the sunset for dinner.
Charmaine,
So glad you enjoyed the snippet.
Very telling detail, her trying to smooth out the wrinkles. Loved the snippet!
Veronica,
So glad you did.
His character is so distinct. Every time he talked, I could “hear” his voice speaking. Great book! 🙂
Teresa,
I’m thrilled you liked the story.
I like the little touches of personality displayed here. She’s not some one-dimensional outlaw or completely hardened against emotions.
Carrie-Anne,
No, she’s not just a hardened outlaw. There is so much more to JoBeth.
Thank you, Karen. An intriguing excerpt. The characters’ words and actions imply a lot. There must be something going on here.
Good luck!
Mary Anne,
So glad you’re intrigued.
I’d want to make a good impression too. This is such an intriguing story.
Elaine,
Thanks so much.
This is a nice little moment– and a telling one, conveyed through your description of her trying to smooth out her coat. Nice work.
Jeff,
Thank you. So glad you enjoyed the snippet.
As others have noted, this adds an interesting bit of vanity to her character.
Edward,
There is so much more to JoBeth…
I wonder if a bit of softness can do the trick.
I can picture this perfectly. The need to be presentable that was so ingrained in young women… the hesitation about her status as a criminal. The realization that she might not have to be hard just to survive all the time. Nice piece.
I love that last line. The fact that she’s trying to not look so rugged is a nice touch. Wanted criminal by word maybe, but inside, I think she’s someone who at heart is searching for where she belongs in life, to forge her own path.