Twirl and Dip is a WIP story (very early stages) Eastyn's POV
Drake believed he'd only do one tour with the band and that would fulfill his itch to be a rock star. He'd come back home and work with his dad. He loved working with his hands. He built a she-shed for her mom that summer before he left, with wood carvings and painted walls depicting the sea. His hands were talented with the hammer, a guitar, and among other things. He claimed he wanted the slow pace of a small town where they could raise a family.
However, no one anticipated Drake's band Never Mind the Damage would be such a hit. The band's song "What's Stoppin' You?" hit #1 on the American charts that first year. In five years, they released three studio albums, accumulating sales of more than 100 million records worldwide, including 45 million here in the states.
(If you'd like to continue the scene...)
Overnight they became the best-selling artists of all time.
How could she ever compete with such success? She was just a small-town woman who sold ice cream. There were no-frills and fancy clothes. Her closet consisted of jeans and T-shirts, and her fifties-style diner outfits she wore to work. Instead of smelling like expensive perfume, her signature scent would be labeled sweet vanilla spice. Perfect if she were going to impress a baker but for the glamorous world of the rich and famous, they'd wonder why she wasn't in the kitchen preparing their meal.
Drake and she were from two different worlds now, but it didn't change the fact she needed a repairman for the shop, and Drake's dad was the best. She stared at the card and took out her cell phone and put in the call to Jack as she headed inside the Twirl and Dip.
Possible Blurb:
Eastyn has her soda shop to run and specialty ice creams to create. Only the place is falling apart, and she may have a haunted jukebox that chooses songs to communicate. If things couldn't get any more complicated, Drake, her ex-fiancé, returns home after five years on the road with his rock band, Never Mind the Damage.
Eastyn vows not to fall for Drake's charms again, but when you have a lifetime of memories with the man, the heart seems not to care about pledges. Her haunted jukebox believes choosing the right song to twirl and dip to is the answer to everything. However, Eastyn isn't convinced. She wants to know if Drake is home for good, or will he break her heart all over again?
It sounds hopeless–Eastyn and her–no matter how much they love(d) each other. Good beginnning, Karen. 🙂
This jumped out at me through first pass, a comma after “left” in the first para?
Teresa,
I’m glad you enjoyed the snippet.
Thanks for the heads-up on the comma, too.
An excellent beginning. I’m curious about the next stage.
Aurora,
I’m glad you’re intrigued.
They definitely have a history. I wonder what will happen when they see each other again, as I’m sure they will.
Jessica,
It should prove interesting.
As always, I love the details about her clothing and the scent…it may be early but I’m enjoying the story. Great snippet!
Veronica,
Thank you. I so glad you’re enjoying the details.
I prefer vanilla spice over those headache inducing expensive brands . . . and my guess is he will, too! Such high end problems with grounded solutions.
Nancy,
You might be right about Drake. We’ll have to wait and see.
Seems she has an undeservedly low opinion of herself, and I bet the life of a rock star isn’t what she’s imagining it to be!
She looking at it logically. He can stay in his world and she will stay in hers, where she is comfortable.
It seems like there’s more to Drake than the rock star image. I love the small details about the shed he made. It sounds beautiful. Great Snippet!
Brittany,
There is much more to Drake. So glad you enjoyed the snippet.
Great beginning. I didn’t see anything to comment on except the quality. I’ve never read rock-star books but this one might change my mind. Reminds me of a song “I Put Your Picture Away.”
Linda,
I’m glad I have you intrigued.
Another interesting start to a story dealing with pop-music stars. You have your niche clearly marked, Karen!
Ed,
I do love music!
I’m enjoying this story. They definitely live in 2 different worlds. Great snippet.
Kind of like “you can never go home again.” When everythting has changed so much, I can see how she would not see a future for them together. Intriguing snippet!